busboys and poets

These lyrics aren't bad, but I have to admit that I was less than impressed with the rhyming patterns and rhythm. Not that they're bad, per se--they're just rather simplistic. ...

Simple and pleasing to the inner ear; I'd love to hear it performed. While the ideas aren't very original, the images themselves are vivid and well-presented, especially the image of ...

Not the most unique or complex of songs, and the word choice could be stronger, but, holistically, I really enjoyed this. =)

The lyrics, while not incredibly original, are quite sweet, and I could see them being the lyrics to a successful song. The only thing I didn't like was the "yeeeeaaahhhh" ...

It's not love sickness it's just sickness Stockholm's Syndrome in Spring But that's the thing This is probably my favorite part, though it's difficult to pick just one. The alliteration ...

It would be nice if any of your raps had a point.

This is a manifestation of popculture-induced incompetence. Amen. I have to say, while it's not my cup of tea I have a healthy respect for rap as an artform--as long ...

I'm sure this would sound better performed, but if it's a rap, there's very little too it. Try adding more.

I love the how deceptively simple it is, and how tactile. Your prose is beautiful here, and the content is just ambivalent enough to be truly compelling; it made me ...

:lol: Cute, if utterly pointless.

I won't say much about the writing itself, which--structurally at least--was very solid. Good job on that. As for the content... well, keep your chin up, duckie, yes? It happens ...

Very interesting. I have not much more to comment on, but it was thought-provoking, and if not a sample of brilliant prose, at least very solid.

Your use of punctuation and spacing are appalling. It makes it very difficult for the reader to comprehend what you're writing about. As for the content itself: You've saturated this ...

I'm afraid Cade's stolen all of my comments, and most of the words I'd use to describe this--especially "juvenile." As a teacher, I'd give this not much more than a ...

First of all, change the format, as mentioned above. It's only polite to not make your readers strain. Secondly, I'd suggest coming up with a more interesting title--"How to be ...